dadek posted a comment on Wednesday 15th July 2009 2:25pm

I really enjoy this chapter and I am looking forward to seeing how it develops. I like how you've captured everyone's personality and you've managed to put some action and tension in this story. I feel this story has the potential to become very wide in scope dealing with both this new plot development and the cannon story line (well roughly anyway). Your writing style is one of my favorites and I've reread this chapter several times just to enjoy it. I like how you've managed to bring so many characters together and still have the focus remain on the the major players. I very much look forward to reading the next chapter and seeing how you chose to develop the story. - Dadek

Crys replied:

Yes, this could become very wide-ranging, but I'm going to keep it focused on Harry.

This is most definitely an AU.   They're in 7th year, AD is alive and hale, horcruxes don't exist.

Glad you're enjoying it.   Next chapter just got posted.

huskerfan posted a comment on Tuesday 14th July 2009 1:54pm

Great story so far, I can't wait to read more. Update soon!!

Zucht posted a comment on Monday 13th July 2009 8:25am

This was a fun chapter to read. I've read many stories of Harry getting pulled into a multiwife/herem situation - but I've never seen Hermione used as the fulcrum before. I'm going to have to look up that Odd Idea's posting. I am literally chomping at the bit for the rest of the story! Zucht413@yahoo.com

Sonicdale posted a comment on Sunday 12th July 2009 3:02pm

As usual, top notch.
I guess we missed the "drug" instead of "dragged".

You know, it's been so long since I read this and talked to you, i've forgotten all the details. So it's like reading it fresh.

Nice bit on the friendliness between Harry and Fil. And the segue into the Min comments. Harry's more of an equal - they see him as such, or at least friends.

Good work. Will email when officially back from vacation tomorrow.

carolebear posted a comment on Saturday 11th July 2009 4:58pm

This is the first story of yours I have read. It looks very interesting. I hope to read more soon.

Grace V Hornbuckle posted a comment on Saturday 11th July 2009 4:33am

Thank you. I just wanted to say that I like this story very much. I am so looking forward to reading many more chapters. It's nice to read something other than Ron Heromine & Ginny. In all honesty I do not like Ginny for Harry. Is Dumbledore going to remain evil? I hope so.As a question, would Daphane & Tracey be able to challange Harry to a token duel to free themselves? or must it be terminal? Again I look forward to reading much more, not only this story, however other stories by yourself as well.
Grace V Hornbuckle. e-mail gvhornbuckle@yahoo.com

Lord Baphomet posted a comment on Friday 10th July 2009 8:03pm

Hey,

I really enjoyed it, though I would like to leave some criticism too.

I think that Harry was surprised that he couldn't just release the girls was a little unrealistic. I just felt that the girls made it very clear that they were exchanging one master for the other, and that they would of just asked if Harry would release them would that be possible.

Also, Ron's behavior just seems odd. I know that he's always the one with his foot in the mouth and lacking tact, but not quite that badly!

Anyways, looking forward to more and I hope it comes soon.

Crys replied:

I understand what you're saying about Harry's surprise, but look at it from his point of view for a moment.   This entire sequence (from his point of view) has taken something like a half an hour.   Not exactly a lot of time to think things through.

Yes, Ron is acting more of a boor than usual, but that will be explained (pureblood view of chattel).

Thanks for the review.   The next chapter was just posted.

liquidfyre posted a comment on Friday 10th July 2009 4:44pm

Interesting idea and looking forward to more

Bob Swagger posted a comment on Friday 10th July 2009 6:27am

Great first chapter. Looking forward to the rest.

willyjoeshow posted a comment on Friday 10th July 2009 4:03am

Great chapter. Hope to read more soon

~Willyjoeshow

jessie179 posted a comment on Thursday 9th July 2009 11:43pm

MORE! Is there more?

Crys replied:

There will be more.

Glad you're enjoying it.

Mihir posted a comment on Thursday 9th July 2009 12:02pm

Pretty good ... I especially found that reference you made regarding Harry and Ginny in The Half Blood Prince humorous
Can't wait to see where this goes ... Do update soon!

athenewolfe posted a comment on Thursday 9th July 2009 10:37am

lovely story so far!

Alex Austin posted a comment on Thursday 9th July 2009 9:53am

Is this done yet, or will I have to continue to watch it? Very interesting premise.

Crys replied:

I encourage you to continue reading.   Many more chapters to come.

DAMNED posted a comment on Thursday 9th July 2009 4:47am

keep it coming its good. is it going to be a long story.

Ron posted a comment on Wednesday 8th July 2009 8:42pm

I hope you'll do more with this

Crys replied:

That was the first chapter.   Many more to come.

Bree Peeler posted a comment on Wednesday 8th July 2009 7:25am

Just to be clear, this is a one-shot? That sucks, I see potential here.

Crys replied:

nope, this isn't a one-shot.   Just the first chapter.

Glad you're enjoying it.

Full_Pensieve posted a comment on Tuesday 7th July 2009 3:54am

Hi, Crys. Someone mentioned that you'd posted a new one, so I quickly popped over to check it out. A nice adaptation of Blot's one-off. By taking his semi-parody and playing it straight, you've ended up with a Harry that's reasonably in character. I like Neville having the backbone to challenge Harry's decision making.

Now, this is the point where a lot of fanfic writers proceed to enter Harry into a harem that pulls in:
(a) Hermione (on the assumption that because she was the brains behind the whole thing, she's actually a closeted bisexual with a thing for Ms. Greengrass);
(b) Ginny (almost obligatory since the DH canon was settled, but still frequently presented as a fangirl with childhood expectations);
(c) Susan Bones (because Jbern, Old Crow et al have succeeded in making the Harry/Susan ship believable and appealing, and in so doing have shaped an accepted Susan fanon... and because poor Susie is doomed in nearly all ship-worthy fanfics to have big, attention-getting breasts);
(d) Luna (since her oddness is a mask for hedonism waiting to be unshackled in the bluntest possible fashion); and
(e) the Player-to-be-named-later (take your pick; nearly everyone else is effectively an OC).

;-D

Is this a one-off, or the first chapter of something? It reads like a first chapter, espec. the way it cuts off. If that's the case, I hope you avoid the pitfall described above. I don't get that impression thus far.

As usual from your work, an enjoyable read.

Cheers,
Mike [FP}

Crys replied:

While I'm not about to give away the plot, I will assure you that this is not going to degenerate into an adolescent male fantasy fic where hung!Harry has every witch under the sun swearing undying servitude toward him, not to mention each bringing their own sexual kink.

Not that there aren't about 25 billion fics out there like that or anything.

This'll be a multi-chapter fic.   This is just the beginning.

Good to hear from you, Mike.   Cheers.

Patrick Rice posted a comment on Tuesday 7th July 2009 3:35am

Very Good Start! I like your continuation of RB's idea, and am hoping for more. Please keep up the good work.

Patrick

sabitha posted a comment on Tuesday 7th July 2009 12:32am

i'm hoping this isn't going to be a oneshot. This has a lot of potential. I am excited to keep reading! Update soon! Please?

Crys replied:

Definitely going to be a multi-chapter fic.

Glad you're enjoying it.