stargenna posted a comment on Saturday 14th January 2012 7:11pm
It felt like one big tease. HP got the raw deal. Why lend his name and fortune to Tracy so she could kick his helping hand back in his face? The bondage discussed here doesn't sound like chattel slavery to me. Read some firsthand slavery narratives. This is like the movie The Help in that it doesn't suit or ring true to the fear entailed.
RavenKnight013 posted a comment on Tuesday 27th December 2011 8:51pm
Good story, good pacing overall. It was interesting throughout, though I was a bit irked at Daphne dying like that and the fact that Harry didn't get the girl, as was so quaintly written...
But I can understand where you came from either way- not everything works out absolutely for the best in real life and a fictional story isn't necessarily any better in that respect.
One last thing- I like the way that Voldemort was weakened before the battle- that was awesome!
havok117 posted a comment on Monday 19th September 2011 2:05am
Everything was fine with your story up to the last two chapters. They were crap. Your the author and its your story but it doesn't change the fact your ending was bad. Harry lost the girl that liked him then lost most of his money and finally became the Minister...
KingDarius posted a comment on Wednesday 14th September 2011 10:22pm
good overall story. though i do find most of the criticisms you just mentioned rather valid, though honestly i did not care that he didnt get involved with either tracy or hermione. it was rather obvious you were leading up to a NL/HG pairing,and not really much leading a conclusion of a HP/TD pairing, though if it had been Daphne who survived(who i would have prefered)that would be another thing entirely. my other criticism is that ron got off way too easily for the shit he pulled.
KingDarius posted a comment on Wednesday 14th September 2011 8:35pm
good so far. though i would like to point out that you neglected to mention whether or not that Malfoy's goons were also charged with trying to end a pureblood line, which they should have been, and, if they had, what the fines paid by their families were.
Feno3000 posted a comment on Friday 9th September 2011 1:22am
Really cool version of a not-really-harem-fic... All the standardized elements are there but it's still fresh and diverse enough to stand out from the lot and shine brightly through the mist of averageness.
I'm actually smiling at the level of disgust i can feel towards your "Ron", as it's rather hilarious to emote something this intense towards a mere literary figure... and then not even either Malfoy was able to enfuriate me quite so strongly. Maybe Snape, but then it's Snivellus, one wouldn't expect anything else from the btard...
Yet another "pureblood customs" are medieval storyline... the execution was solid, the reasoning okay... the level of disbelief on the other hand did rather poorly in my eyes... even the wizarding world that followed Fudges dirt in the Prophet should not be so heavily against Harry when proof of his integrity is clearly visible before all eyes. And moreso... the purebloods and especially the traditionalist purebloods are a minority... the students at Hogwarts should not feel like treating the girls so abundantly disrespectful in their majority.
The plot around the "dissolution" of the chattel marriage was a nice twist, but also a little bit the cowards way out. showing Harry to stand and fight against the pureblood stupidity by ripping down their precious legal construct piece for piece in the Wizengamot using his after Voldyshorts Fame and the influence and cunning of the now allied Davis, Greengrass and Longbottom families (and maybe others as well) would imo have been superior to having them simply divorced because of legalities and the change put into a half sentence of the postscript... but well, everybody's tastes are different and at least you did not exclude any later romance, did you? ;)
Ledivin posted a comment on Monday 5th September 2011 12:54pm
That was so sad...
selonianth posted a comment on Monday 4th July 2011 2:42am
To be honest while I can see where you're coming from as far as he's in a nice place. You still did the same thing most of us are angry with JK for doing. You put him through hell in the form of all that shit with Malfoy and getting attacked, you killed Daphne, and then what you give him is the Ministry. I'm not flaming when I say this, but He deserved more after all that and you know it.
reader1writer1 posted a comment on Monday 6th June 2011 12:49pm
Good story. Slightly confusing ending, but good story.
reader1writer1 posted a comment on Monday 6th June 2011 12:46pm
Awww. and somehow, I didn't realize that Daphne had died. :(
reader1writer1 posted a comment on Monday 6th June 2011 12:08pm
very exciting. I love take-charge Harry and Neville. I thought we'd see Luna warming up to the Harry/Daphne/Tracey trio.
reader1writer1 posted a comment on Monday 6th June 2011 10:10am
Excellent chapter, though I do wonder why Snape's actions weren't considered a slight against the Potter family with all that that entails
reader1writer1 posted a comment on Monday 6th June 2011 9:17am
Good to know there needn't always be a cliffy :) good chapter
reader1writer1 posted a comment on Sunday 5th June 2011 8:03pm
very intriguing cliffie there :)
reader1writer1 posted a comment on Sunday 5th June 2011 5:03pm
I just can't believe there's no way to legalize things.
reader1writer1 posted a comment on Sunday 5th June 2011 4:29pm
Good chapter--I do hope he tells the girls that they'll really be wives--or makes a way to ensure that
wolfwood posted a comment on Sunday 15th May 2011 9:20pm
Apologies for the double post. Didn't think my first one made it.
wolfwood posted a comment on Sunday 15th May 2011 9:15pm
I have to agree with most of the comments you put int he epilogue, I liked everything except the last couple chapters. Quickly and quietly killing off the girl who did like him, and leaving him alone at the end, a disappointing ending that leaves the story without a feeling of resolution. No one was particularly happy, or sad, just apathetic.
wolfwood posted a comment on Sunday 15th May 2011 6:40pm
I have to agree with most of the comments you put int he epilogue, I liked everything except the last couple chapters. Quickly and quietly killing off the girl who did like him, and leaving him alone at the end, a disappointing ending
LordSia posted a comment on Tuesday 3rd May 2011 7:05pm
Perhaps they should have suggested that the seemingly irrational governors be checked for the mysterious "plague"? You can never be to careful, after all.
Great fic, rereading it for the... Third time, I think.
... I need a life.