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NarutosBrat posted a comment on Monday 11th June 2018 2:57pm

I don't see why people are so quick to claim bashing for this, as Ron acted similarly dismissive of things in canon. Okay, so attempting to rape Hermione might not be canon, based on the mindset of some purebloods set by this fic, it's plausible.

NarutosBrat posted a comment on Monday 11th June 2018 8:39am

Damn, I was hoping I'd be wrong about Ron. Like I said in my other review, not exactly surprised it happened.

Seriously, I wonder if Dumbledore knows he bears some of the blame for Snape's actions, what with constantly protecting him. Although, it does make me wonder. Snape tried to force himself onto Tracey without Harry's permission, so wouldn't Harry be able to bring some kind of charges against Snape for theft of property or something.

NarutosBrat posted a comment on Monday 11th June 2018 7:05am

I give Ron maybe three more chapters max before Hermione drops him like a bad habit.

ibskib posted a comment on Sunday 8th April 2018 9:19pm

A downer to see that Daphne didn't live, I liked her better than Tracey, and the whole jumping in front of a spell was a bit too cliched. I'm disappointed that Harry didn't end up with anyone, makes him feel too much like some kind of asexual hero trope rather than a real person. Especially with that whole BS about the girls not being able to say yes, because they couldn't say no, it was just stupid.

After all there was no magic enforcing it, so they could in fact say no if they wanted to. Daphne was very obviously willing enough and could have made a good girlfriend if Harry hadn't been struck with author induced stupidity.

ibskib posted a comment on Sunday 8th April 2018 8:39pm

In the previous chapter the dark mark was mentioned as an example of ownership, making Snape and the other Deatheaters defacto chattel, something Harry or one of the others should at least have thought of at some point, which they could have thrown in Snape's face.

Sinfield4 posted a comment on Sunday 4th March 2018 8:19am

Was a interesting read thanks

Maha1959 posted a comment on Monday 29th January 2018 4:51pm

hello, i discovered your fic when i was reading the author JECONAIS.

i read it in 2 days and i found it beautiful and with the main topic (chattel) very enlightning.

thank you for this. i hopr to hear of you Maha from Paris

Paddybee posted a comment on Sunday 10th December 2017 11:40am

It is so nice to read a fanfic written in competent English, no bad idioms, correct spelling and a logical entertaining plot.

Thank you, I look forward to reading more.

Paddybee

VikingLord posted a comment on Wednesday 6th September 2017 5:08am

What was Snape doing in the hospital wing? He had no standing there as he'd been removed from the staff. Harry would never have let him stay, neither would have McGonagall nor Flitwick. He has a know grudge with Harry and on more than one occasion tried to harm him, was biased etc. Really a poor choice to include him to my thinking.

ichaos posted a comment on Tuesday 18th July 2017 12:45am

I'm sorry, but I did not like this story. The phrase "no pain, no gain" comes to mind. As usual, Harry faces the pain but this time he doesn't really ebd up with anything to show for it

karry299 posted a comment on Saturday 19th November 2016 7:43pm

Ah, i wasted my time on this story. Good to know.

Shezari posted a comment on Friday 22nd January 2016 9:16am

just fyi the past tense of drag is dragged, not drug.

sudoapt posted a comment on Sunday 10th January 2016 1:24am

What the f*ck!

Great story...worst ending I have ever seen! Not only does the one girl to show affection and possibly budding love to Harry dies, but the other girl...who gains her freedom wants to stay with an honerable man like Harry...and he's answer is "it would be just too weird"!

What the actual fuck?

Lastly, everyone who has a modicum of knowledge of Harry as a character knows that Harry HATES politics...he would never have become minister of magic...ever!

You may not have wanted a romance story but thats what it was shaping up to be...and it had alot of potential to be a great romance story. This ending was absolutely awful!

Himanshu.99 posted a comment on Sunday 3rd January 2016 12:10pm

I agree with author but still he should have ended up with someone maybe Luna. Anyway it was one of the best story although last two to three chapters felt rushed but its up for author to decide.

Himanshu.99 posted a comment on Sunday 3rd January 2016 12:04pm

I feel really sorry for the way Daphne died. She shouldn't have died but it is your story not mine and I enjoyed it.

Himanshu.99 posted a comment on Sunday 3rd January 2016 4:38am

Nice story so far. I think you should also post this story on fanfiction to get more appreciation and reviews. Hope this helps.

mwinter posted a comment on Saturday 11th April 2015 5:22pm

Still really enjoy rereading this.

rgshea96789 posted a comment on Monday 17th November 2014 12:05am

Well done! Nice timeline.

The Seeker posted a comment on Friday 31st October 2014 6:44pm

After your wonderful examination of Pureblood-driven laws, specifically that concerning 'chattel wives,' and the tense build up to the Voldemort/Harry confrontation, for me at least, the story fell apart. Using Brad's highly limited pov was irritating and out of context with the rest of the story. Basically, it detracted from what I wanted to know - how Harry and his group were doing, the confrontations with the DEs inside the house, finally meeting Riddle, etc. Handling it through another's pov diminished one of the two primary threads to almost the level of a footnote.

More frustrating than the minimalizing of the battle and defeat of Riddle was the complete dropping of your primary theme: the chattel wives law. Unlike your AN #2, Harry not ending up with Tracey, Daphne and/or Hermione didn't bother me per se. Instead, I wanted to see how this law affected the lives of Harry, Tracey and Daphne after they graduated from Hogwarts and entered 'adult' life. You'd done an excellent job describing the pitfalls, loss of self-identity, and prejudice through most of the story. So, I was shocked when you killed Daphne to eliminate having to do anything later with her. Even more irritating was Harry and Tracey shrugging their shoulders and fabricating a very flimsy scam to get Tracey out of the chattle contract, as if what they went through meant nothing to them. These two decisions - to kill off Daphne and get Tracey out of the contract/marriage caused the rest of your story to become meaningless.

Sorry,but I thought the story was well written and interesting until the battle chapter, then it felt like you lost interest in it. - The Seeker

The Seeker posted a comment on Friday 31st October 2014 1:12pm

This should be interesting, since Harry usually in not paired with a pureblood only legal situation. Of course, from an expository standpoint, Harry is the perfect wizard for this to happen to, given his almost complete lack of knowledge about most things 'Pureblood,' not to mention legal or marital. Wonder if there will be a meeting/confrontation with Daphne and Tracey's parents, since this form of contract is unusual and highly one-sided for the wizard. Also, nice way to slam these practices, since 'we've always done it this way' is not a reason for allowing Lucius to broker these arrangements. Excellent start!