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BlameTheNargles12 posted a comment on Saturday 30th November 2013 11:33am

I have two things to say and a question-

1. I really like how you aren't making Ginny a bitchy whore, because there are a lot of people who do that.

2. I now love LOVE Tracey/Daphne/Harry because you wrote this SOOOO well.

3. Is this Neville/Hermione? It seems like it...

Crys replied:

1 & 2: glad you're enjoying it

3: there are definite elements of that in here, but I don't give a definite answer one way or another.  I leave that for you to decide.

Muroshi9 posted a comment on Thursday 19th September 2013 9:56pm

I was really enjoying this story till you went for the tragedy ending. Even if he didn't end up with one of the three that still was no cause to just kill off Daph. Harry was already dead from Voldie's last strike. It could have ended with both girls free. Her death just seems arbitrary. And it wasn't made very clear that he was minister. Just that he had an office and his friends came to talk.

Crys replied:

Daph dying was the plan from the start.  As you pointed out, this was a borderline tragedy.  I wasn't being gratuitously evil, I was trying to point out that not everyone lives happily ever after, even if Harry thinks he's in a pretty good place.

Minister: his secretary called him Minister and he can introduce bills to the Wizengamot.  Okay, I didn't specify Minister of Magic, but I did try to imply it.

thank you for reviewing.

Engrprince posted a comment on Friday 13th September 2013 11:08am

I enjoyed the story except that Harry is not with someone. You have developed a Relationship with three girls showed Harry would be a great husband. One dies and the other two aren't with him. That there is no relationship with some female (Ginny, Susan, Luna, Katie or any other know character) is such a let down takes a lot away from the story. Too Bad

draco6812 posted a comment on Thursday 25th April 2013 3:51am

I love the story but i have to say that that was the dumbest ending. I mean Harry did all that and he ended up alone...or did you put him with ginny?

amsev posted a comment on Thursday 17th January 2013 3:47am

wonderful job on this chapter seeing it from a relative "outsider" namely Brad. This story is awesome! Thank you for writing it.

raven3182 posted a comment on Tuesday 15th January 2013 11:46pm

This is a good story. However, as you noted that some of the other reviewers said, I think the ending was a bit lacking. You do have your argument as to why Harry didn't end up with one of the girls, but it just feels wrong to the reader. You may be right that it probably wouldn't work out that way in real lfe, but this isn't real life, it's a story. And in stories the hero gets the girl, or else the happy ending isn't so happy. Anyways, that point aside, I really enjoyed reading this. You managed to take a situation that is normally used simply for smut and make and intelligent, well developed story. Well done. Thanks for writing!

Gioia posted a comment on Friday 22nd June 2012 2:08pm

I really enjoyed this fic as something other than a smutfest or romance. Smut and romance have their place in some stories, but a premise that involved slavery was not, in my opinion, the best place for either. So your way of handling this was just perfect.

I really do love the Harry Potter series, but the truth is that it was written for kids, which means that a lot of the serious issues are glossed over. As a 30-something mom, I've been bothered by the things that are not pursued to their logical ends: Child abuse, slavery, date-rape potions, etc. - these are real and are all depicted in the HP universe. I therfore appreciated how you took this crackish idea* and used it to look at some of those serious issues, following them through to their logical conclusions. If a world in which those other issues I named are allowed to continue as part of the status quo, a scenario such as you have here does make sense. And if that's a part of their world, what does it say about their people, their customs, and their laws? Very little that's good.

* And just for the record, lest anyone misunderstand, by calling the story premise "crackish," I don't mean that as an insult to either you, Rorschach's Blot, or the idea itself. I'm very fond of crack!fics, especially when an author has the ability to turn them into well thought out, logically scripted stories such as this one.

Thanks for all of your hard work! This was fun. :)

Crys replied:

I agree, smut or romance have a place, but I'm not likely to produce either.

I'm also a parent, and some of the topics in the series also bother me.  The very concept of laughing off a love potion . . .

I didn't take offense.  My personal definition of "crackish" is different, but I see where you were coming from.

Glad you enjoyed the story.

Banner posted a comment on Thursday 7th June 2012 3:29pm

I enjoyed this one all the way through. I love the characterizations - they feel absolutely perfect to me. The ending was quietly satisfying. Thank you.

Crys replied:

I'm glad to hear you enjoyed it.

Clell65619 posted a comment on Thursday 31st May 2012 4:10pm

- Ok, I've just re-read this one, and I have to say, I still love it.

- I know you took a lot of crap for the ending, but god it's good.

- So when do we see something new from you?

Crys replied:

Glad you enjoyed it, Clell.

I have a small to medium piece that's nearly done, as well as working on Snide 7.  Two other pieces that may or may not go anywhere as well.

I've slowed down, but I'm not quite stopped.

amsev posted a comment on Thursday 19th April 2012 2:55am

Compelling story about some awfulness considering the archaic nature of the wizarding world. I'm sorry one of the 'Bines died, but this was an excellent story.

Thank you for writing!

stargenna posted a comment on Saturday 14th January 2012 7:11pm

It felt like one big tease. HP got the raw deal. Why lend his name and fortune to Tracy so she could kick his helping hand back in his face? The bondage discussed here doesn't sound like chattel slavery to me. Read some firsthand slavery narratives. This is like the movie The Help in that it doesn't suit or ring true to the fear entailed.

RavenKnight013 posted a comment on Tuesday 27th December 2011 8:51pm

Good story, good pacing overall. It was interesting throughout, though I was a bit irked at Daphne dying like that and the fact that Harry didn't get the girl, as was so quaintly written...
But I can understand where you came from either way- not everything works out absolutely for the best in real life and a fictional story isn't necessarily any better in that respect.
One last thing- I like the way that Voldemort was weakened before the battle- that was awesome!

havok117 posted a comment on Monday 19th September 2011 2:05am

Everything was fine with your story up to the last two chapters. They were crap. Your the author and its your story but it doesn't change the fact your ending was bad. Harry lost the girl that liked him then lost most of his money and finally became the Minister...

KingDarius posted a comment on Wednesday 14th September 2011 10:22pm

good overall story. though i do find most of the criticisms you just mentioned rather valid, though honestly i did not care that he didnt get involved with either tracy or hermione. it was rather obvious you were leading up to a NL/HG pairing,and not really much leading a conclusion of a HP/TD pairing, though if it had been Daphne who survived(who i would have prefered)that would be another thing entirely. my other criticism is that ron got off way too easily for the shit he pulled.

KingDarius posted a comment on Wednesday 14th September 2011 8:35pm

good so far. though i would like to point out that you neglected to mention whether or not that Malfoy's goons were also charged with trying to end a pureblood line, which they should have been, and, if they had, what the fines paid by their families were.

Feno3000 posted a comment on Friday 9th September 2011 1:22am

Really cool version of a not-really-harem-fic... All the standardized elements are there but it's still fresh and diverse enough to stand out from the lot and shine brightly through the mist of averageness.

I'm actually smiling at the level of disgust i can feel towards your "Ron", as it's rather hilarious to emote something this intense towards a mere literary figure... and then not even either Malfoy was able to enfuriate me quite so strongly. Maybe Snape, but then it's Snivellus, one wouldn't expect anything else from the btard...

Yet another "pureblood customs" are medieval storyline... the execution was solid, the reasoning okay... the level of disbelief on the other hand did rather poorly in my eyes... even the wizarding world that followed Fudges dirt in the Prophet should not be so heavily against Harry when proof of his integrity is clearly visible before all eyes. And moreso... the purebloods and especially the traditionalist purebloods are a minority... the students at Hogwarts should not feel like treating the girls so abundantly disrespectful in their majority.

The plot around the "dissolution" of the chattel marriage was a nice twist, but also a little bit the cowards way out. showing Harry to stand and fight against the pureblood stupidity by ripping down their precious legal construct piece for piece in the Wizengamot using his after Voldyshorts Fame and the influence and cunning of the now allied Davis, Greengrass and Longbottom families (and maybe others as well) would imo have been superior to having them simply divorced because of legalities and the change put into a half sentence of the postscript... but well, everybody's tastes are different and at least you did not exclude any later romance, did you? ;)

Ledivin posted a comment on Monday 5th September 2011 12:54pm

That was so sad...

selonianth posted a comment on Monday 4th July 2011 2:42am

To be honest while I can see where you're coming from as far as he's in a nice place. You still did the same thing most of us are angry with JK for doing. You put him through hell in the form of all that shit with Malfoy and getting attacked, you killed Daphne, and then what you give him is the Ministry. I'm not flaming when I say this, but He deserved more after all that and you know it.

reader1writer1 posted a comment on Monday 6th June 2011 12:49pm

Good story. Slightly confusing ending, but good story.

reader1writer1 posted a comment on Monday 6th June 2011 12:46pm

Awww. and somehow, I didn't realize that Daphne had died. :(