Chattel
The Duel
By Crys
Reviews
Stygius posted a comment on Friday 3rd July 2009 3:55pm for The Duel
more?
it seemed a little rushed and dis-connected at a few points, which didn't seem completely natural. but then with you scenerio i believe normal has nothing to do with it.
overall a nice foundation of something more.
Crys replied:
Definitely more chapters to come.
Glad you're enjoying it.
Orion posted a comment on Friday 3rd July 2009 3:38pm for The Duel
This was a fun read. Thanks for writing.
PopeYodaI posted a comment on Friday 3rd July 2009 3:09pm for The Duel
Mmmm.. vastly improved over Rorschach's excellent idea. A bit disappointed you chose to keep the Retard!Dumbledore thing going, but if it's necessary for your plot, by all means keep it. Although keep in mind that he is (I think) a pure-blood himself.
Well, I look forward to your next chapter. Probably going to be the feedback he gets from his actions (Rita writing more disparaging articles, offers of money from idiots in exchange for time with the two ladies leading to much Violent!Harry, etc...)
Crys replied:
AD's a naive idiot at this point, but he will get better.
As for your guesses . . . *innocent whistling*
blue artemis posted a comment on Friday 3rd July 2009 2:56pm for The Duel
Quite interesting.
Jonathan Langford posted a comment on Friday 3rd July 2009 2:23pm for The Duel
I'm assuming there's more to it than this...
A very good start.
Crys replied:
Yep, more chapters coming.
Glad you're enjoying it.
dogbertcarroll posted a comment on Friday 3rd July 2009 1:50pm for The Duel
I always did want to see this expanded. Nice work.
stormwing921 posted a comment on Friday 3rd July 2009 1:12pm for The Duel
nice start can't wait to see how it unfolds
ching965 posted a comment on Friday 3rd July 2009 12:58pm for The Duel
Very well written. This is an interesting way to look at the situation. There are a number of betrothal stories out there. The idea of chattel, though, isn't very often seen. You've definitely done it justice. Fabulously written. Thank you for a great read. I hope for more soon.
FireStorm posted a comment on Friday 3rd July 2009 12:52pm for The Duel
Excellent job. I am looking forward to you continuing this.
Deborahsu posted a comment on Friday 3rd July 2009 12:35pm for The Duel
A good start--I look forward to seeing what happens next!!
SassyFrass posted a comment on Friday 3rd July 2009 12:31pm for The Duel
Very interesting. I would love to read more of this.
Crys replied:
There will be more.
Glad you're enjoying it.
Ezra'eil posted a comment on Friday 3rd July 2009 12:23pm for The Duel
Poor Harry, he's 'gonna get roasted'....
dennisud posted a comment on Friday 3rd July 2009 12:13pm for The Duel
Like the start of this!
But if I know Malfoy Sr. he's already cooking up a way to get back at Harry either through the two girls, or one of his close friends. He IS an arranger of marriages, right. Why not Force Hermione to marry a Malfoy ally or something! Make even more bad blood with the Wizarding society if what Neville says is true!
See you got me already!
BTW a H/Hr & H/L fan but easily adding H/D/T to that!
dennisud
DrT posted a comment on Friday 3rd July 2009 12:00pm for The Duel
An interesting continuation of the story!
Jonathan Northwood posted a comment on Friday 3rd July 2009 11:58am for The Duel
This is delightfully written, and it's an intriguing premise. If this is a one-shot, then you've done a marvelous job of leaving me clamoring for more.
If this is the beginning of a longer story, then you've made me very, very happy.
Crys replied:
This is just the beginning. More chapters to come.
Glad you're enjoying it.
Jizzle posted a comment on Friday 3rd July 2009 11:45am for The Duel
I like this. The most impressive thing about it, by far, is how awesome you made Seamus in, what, four lines? Fantastic.
red jacobson1 posted a comment on Friday 3rd July 2009 11:42am for The Duel
excellent beginning and I'm looking forward to seeing where you take this story. Are you planning to cap it off with just Tracey and Daphne, or are you going to include Hermione in the fun?
red
Crys replied:
As they said, Harry can marry again later. Now, whether he does or not . . .
Frank Hacklander posted a comment on Friday 3rd July 2009 11:30am for The Duel
I too liked this very much. Two points of interest. First, how are you going to get rid of the Weasely/Ginny nonsense and second, how does Harry get two concubines? The corollary to the second question is can Harry upgrade Tracey and/or Daphne to wife status? Does he even want to? At heart, I am a Harmonian, but like Daphne (perhaps due to the efforts of Jeconnais and others). I look forward to the next bit where I will try to be more helpfully critical.
Crys replied:
Ginny's not going to be an issue. She'll get mentioned before the wedding.
Technically, both Tracey and Daphne will be wives, though more like concubines in a legal sense. No, he can't "promote" them. They will not become "people" again unless he dies, so they're stuck at slave status.
Thanks for reading, and glad you're enjoying it.
Dustin Hoeppner posted a comment on Friday 3rd July 2009 11:23am for The Duel
The story is very good. Is there another chapters to these?
Crys replied:
Yes, more chapters coming. Glad you're enjoying it.
spornoc posted a comment on Friday 3rd July 2009 4:17pm for The Duel
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