Wonderbee31 posted a comment on Friday 21st November 2008 3:01pm for Sever

Nice and a bit dark there, and wonder what may have happened with Harry for him to have that dream, sometime after the DoM and maybe an argument with Hermione or Ron?

Bocardo posted a comment on Friday 21st November 2008 2:30pm for Sever

ooc or not, this was very entertaining.
it would make a pretty good story i'd say.

anonmg1 posted a comment on Friday 21st November 2008 2:30pm for Sever

please write more on this. it's too funny not to be continued.

Eric_Von_Nesslau posted a comment on Friday 21st November 2008 2:06pm for Sever

Well, that is some heavy irony, and one of the more recent cliches... good work. I especially liked the trap Ron fell into.

PopeYodaI posted a comment on Friday 21st November 2008 2:04pm for Sever

I absolutely loved this, and pray you give us a part 2 featuring the fall out from this. Brilliance in the extreme, as it's so rare to get original ideas these days

Frederick Herriot posted a comment on Friday 21st November 2008 2:00pm for Sever

One word to this, my friend . . .

Whoa!

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Friday 21st November 2008 1:36pm for Sever

I enjoy a good boomerang of ill will.

This was a terrific short.

Crys replied:

"Reap what you sow"

". . . it be returned tri-fold" (Don't remember the exact phrasing, but that's the gist.)

Thanks for the kind words.

 

Jonathan Northwood posted a comment on Friday 21st November 2008 1:06pm for Sever

While this is obviously an OoC situation for all parties involved -- well, all but Harry and the Goblins -- it's exceptionally well-written and beautifully paced. You have a delightful way of twisting the situation to favor the accused, all while remaining within canon. Lovely, simply lovely.

Gardengirl posted a comment on Friday 21st November 2008 12:58pm for Sever

Hilarious! Thanks for sharing :)

jilumasam posted a comment on Friday 21st November 2008 12:44pm for Sever

It might be a dream....but a pretty good one at that!!!!!

Brian64 posted a comment on Friday 21st November 2008 12:31pm for Sever

Doesn't Hermione owe two life debts? I'm fairly sure in the book that he saved her (along with Sirius & himself) from being kissed by the dementors.

Wonder what she owes for both? :D

Interesting story.. Wouldn't mind finding out what happens next, but of course, it's not going to be continued is it. Oh well.

Brian

jdcox61 posted a comment on Friday 21st November 2008 12:26pm for Sever

hehe, they're slaves. this is pretty good. Love those stories where all weasleys are idiots except forge

kb0 posted a comment on Friday 21st November 2008 12:15pm for Sever

Haha, that's really amusing. And you had George sum it all up so nicely. :-)

Vaguely reminds me of a story where Harry goes to Gringotts and starts getting a whole bunch of girls because of inheritances and life debts (can't remember the name).

Crys replied:

I've seen that (what you describe) done a couple times, actually.   Don't remember the titles, either.

Thanks for the review.

Renzo7 posted a comment on Friday 21st November 2008 12:06pm for Sever

That was hillarious! Great work, keep it up and please update soon.

Theresa posted a comment on Friday 21st November 2008 11:57am for Sever

This chapter is brilliant! I would love to see it fleshed out some more.

Ezra'eil posted a comment on Friday 21st November 2008 11:55am for Sever

Mwahahahahahahahahahahaha!

bgoldnyxnet posted a comment on Friday 21st November 2008 11:52am for Sever

Oh, that is so evil.

Harry being Harry, I think we can assume he will find _some_ way to give them back their freedom, at least. But it will probably be damn complicated, and by the time it's finished they will all have changed their minds anyway.

But, this being a dream... I guess we'll never find out how it comes out. Damn!

Killedbykarma posted a comment on Friday 21st November 2008 11:42am for Sever

Sounds like the kind of dream Harry would have post-Department of Mysteries.
Of course for that ending he'd have to had a good day before he went to bed. XD

Mark Safransky posted a comment on Friday 21st November 2008 11:27am for Sever

May be a dream, but it's hilarious nonetheless.

Eric Oppen posted a comment on Friday 21st November 2008 11:22am for Sever

This is why playing with laws that you don't fully understand is a very, very, very bad idea. I love the sheer irony of the whole thing.

And having Hermione and Ginny as slaves...hmmm, this might have some possibilities!

Crys replied:

I leave exactly what Harry does with a Hermione and Ginny (who have betrayed him and therefore he cannot reasonably think of them as friends)  who are  his personal slaves up to your imagination.

Try not to sprain your brain with that one, Eric :)