Scion of Gryffindor
By Crys
Just as long as Tonks isn't portraying herself as the Mull of Kinsfire!!!
As a body guard, you do not open doors for your client, you do not carry packages for your client, and you do not drive for your client (you have an assigned guard to the duty). You keep your eyes open and hands empty at all times. You are not a servant. You are not a gopher. You are not a babysitter. Your duties are clearly specified and you walk away from any client who will not follow them.
ooh, i really don't like how u portrayed molly weasley. she has acted a little over bearing and protective, but she always knew who lupin was, and she's a woman that talked of scarlet women, there's no way she'd come out and accuse tonks like that. mrs. weasley also wouldn't be stupid enough to try in front of harry--she isn't a manipulator like dumbledore could possibly be in fan fic stories; i feel as if u took her character flaw and made it her entire character, which i don't think is good writing.(but i do still wanna see what happens in your story!)
Fan-bloody-tastic! Squee!
Love the last bit best.
Ch.21 - - The complexities of this story are thrilling. I like they way everything happens.
The dialogue is well done indeed. The characterizations of this type of Dumbledore-free Harry is amazing. Tonks as the girlfriend is not tawdry at all for 16 and 22 year olds.
The insights KS gives into pureblood wizarding is an excellent view of a byzantine world.
Excellent, excellent job on the Weasley confrontation. Harry saying what he needed to without blowing his top. Molly is a dear, but I'm glad you had Harry take her to task.
Good chapter once again Crys! I really liked the whole thing a lot. The bit with Malfoy was excellent as were harry's confrontations with Molly and later his talk with Hermione. Good work also on the teasing with Tonks about the shower. Can't wait to read the next bit now! Cheers!
Loved this chapter.
Tonks act was great. Can't wait to see what Witch Weekly prints about 'her'. Especially when they can't dig up info on who she is.
If Tonks is going to be someone different everytime then maybe she shold look like a Veela one time. I can just imagine all the girls upset about poor Harry being stolen by a Veela's charm.
Liked your characterization of Draco. he seems to be sitting on the fence, wonder what will push him off it.
Bad Mrs. Weasley hope someone shows her how wrong she is. I wonder what her children think about this, has she tried to control their lives too-is that why all the older kids move out as soon as
possible.
Loved the characterization of Ron and Hermione, Harry has matured faster than them and their friendship is suffering for it. Hope Hermione and Ron grow up soon and repair the damage.
Loved the WWW board meeting. Can't wait to see what products the twins come out with for their spy line. Maybe some glasses that show you what is all around you(360) like those glasses that have the
mirrors in the outside position so you can see behind you.
Makes it hard for people to sneak up on you.
One small mistake, you never said what Ingid looked like. Kinda hard to envision a scene without discription.
Later
Chris
hmmm... Wayne's world was released in '92 (I'm doubtful of whether or not Gred and Forge know who Alice Cooper is, however) but... is the chicken thing from an SNL skit? That might be anachronistic. (I vaguely remember an SNL skit with a rubber chicken-as-gavel, but it's probably not where you got the idea)
Anyone for Shack-bashing?
It seems like the former Auror takes his turn on the wrong end of the hammer (especially from Tonks).
Surprise #2: Narcissa Black (yes, you read that right) is leaving Lucius. Amazingly, Draco is NOT in a snit over it (in fact, he is considering bailing himself).
Meanwhile, Harry asks for an audit of Bella's last two years worth of transactions from Gringott's. He is also in a bit of a snit with Molly, Ron, and Hermione.
Love the use of kinsfires name.That was great.
another great chapter