Faith1 posted a comment on Monday 3rd August 2009 11:30pm for The Wedding

*snicker*

Jason Karr posted a comment on Monday 3rd August 2009 10:01am for The Wedding

please don't put Hermione with Ron or Niveal. Put her with Harry. The Headmaster is an idiot.

DarkFalcon posted a comment on Monday 3rd August 2009 8:54am for The Wedding

awesome, very well written. keep it up!

PaulKellington posted a comment on Monday 3rd August 2009 4:48am for The Wedding

I can think of few authors I would trust to further one of Rorschach's ideas ... you are one of them.

You've done a good job so far and I'm enjoying it. I especially like the way you handled the wedding. So many authors would have glossed over the trauma of the event and had the trio attending the after party with jokes, smiles and blushes. Your version seemed more appropriate to me.

Dracolych69 posted a comment on Monday 3rd August 2009 4:19am for The Wedding

You really do like the cliffys, don't you? A nice story progression chapter. Looking forward to the next chapter!

Crys replied:

Well, at least this was a "nicer" cliffy, wasn't it?

I promise, no cliffy next time.

Glad you're enjoying it.

Prince Charon posted a comment on Monday 3rd August 2009 2:23am for The Wedding

Ah, the nudity commences! (Well, probably.)

Good part. Thank you for updating.

More soon, please.

Patches posted a comment on Sunday 2nd August 2009 8:30pm for The Wedding

This is a sad excuse of a wedding. No best man, no brides maids, no vows of love, cherish, etc. I'm so glad that Neville was able to finally shut Ron up. Legally he was right. Morally he was wrong. I hope they can get that through to him someday. I'm glad Professor is such a good friend to Harry. That helps. The girls certainly know their status. I hope Harry can figure out a way to feel good about this relationship someday. I look forward to more of this story. pms

Crys replied:

Yes, that was a sad excuse for a wedding.   It was supposed to be.   More of a legal "change of status" than anything else.   And Phil tried to make that clear to those of the audience (and readers) who've never witnessed a wizard wedding previously.

Yeah, Ron's attitude is reflecting the pureblood view.   Legally, they're toys.   Morally, they're people, dammit!   Hence Harry's muggle-raised sensibilities colliding with Ron's viewpoint.

I've always liked Flitwick and McG.   Seemed reasonable to make them allies of poor Harry in this situation.

Glad you're enjoying it.

skulLXeon posted a comment on Sunday 2nd August 2009 7:48pm for The Wedding

damn... that... is a very dirty cliff hanger.... except for all i know they could be playing Jenga and its shocked Harry.... XD This fic's been awesome so far.... i'll be looking forward to the update.... XD

Tom Hackwood posted a comment on Sunday 2nd August 2009 3:01pm for The Wedding

This is one of the happier stories I've read recently. I do have one concern and one question though.

My concern is that I'm not seeing any difference between Tracey and Daphne. The way I read this, you could mix the two names up in a blender and no-one will ever know the difference. Can you try to put in some personality quirks or occasionally describe the girls so they become two distinct individuals as opposed to a couple of interchangeable blobs?

My question is, since Daphne and Tracey are chattel, only a step up - if that - from a dining room table, will Harry have the opportunity to have a wife that is not an "object"?

Crys replied:

I have tried to differentiate them.   It becomes more apparent in the next chapter when there is more direct interation.

In public, Tracey is more teasing, Daphne more quiet and reserved.   In private, Daphne is much more affectionate, Tracey more bluntly honest and is just as happy to stay at arm's distance.   However, they both defer to him and are trying to gently teach him the role he has to play.   In that part, they are very similar.

Yes, it's been clearly stated that Harry has the option of marrying a "real" wife later.

rune1806 posted a comment on Sunday 2nd August 2009 5:35am for The Wedding

I am very much enjoying the story, as it is different from most. I like the way you keep up the digs at the wizarding world, I look forward to more.

00_Knight posted a comment on Sunday 2nd August 2009 3:44am for The Wedding

"Can we kill off the entire Malfoy line just to make a point?"

Aran St. Vines has an excelent point!

hope you follow that one ^_^

Crys replied:

He does.   And the possibility has long since occured to me.   We'll see how it fits by the end of the story.

Thanks for the review.

00_Knight posted a comment on Sunday 2nd August 2009 3:37am for The Wedding

Not the twist i was expecting after "It was on the way out of the jewelry shop that all further plans for the day were shot to hell," But entertaining to say the least!

This has been an Overly Pleasant, Enormously Exciting, and Downright Interesting piece of fiction to read!=D

Can't wait to see what happens with your twist, if its me I'd be inclined to err on a more voldemort-ish intervention, but as with your last teaser, I can only hope to be curious!

Great read Crys!

Dave0126 posted a comment on Saturday 1st August 2009 2:33pm for The Wedding

I dislike stories where Harry never questions why he is suddenly poor or nearly so after inheriting large amounts from Sirius and being led to believe that the Potters where very wealthy. Someone has obviously been ripping him off!

noylj posted a comment on Saturday 1st August 2009 2:29pm for The Wedding

I Harry really that dense and is Tracy really that cold?
Forgetting chattel, they are his wives and he has certain duties to himself and them.
I cannot believe that you made Harry that poor. How is he going to maintain them on so little.
Great story.

brad posted a comment on Saturday 1st August 2009 10:56am for The Wedding

Okay, so it wasn't an attack by Voldemort or death eaters; just the meeting-the-parents thing. :-)

I couldn't muster up much respect for the Greengrass or Davis men, for them or their attempts to intimidate Harry. They'd *failed* their daughters, their family, and Harry was stepping up to bail them out. That eradicates any claim or standing that they might have had to vet his worthiness as a husband, I reckon.

Safe to say Astoria won't be marrying Draco - the nasty version you're writing - in this story!? Or will Harry end up with *three* concubines?! :-)

Okay, Slipknot was obnoxious, there must be some skullduggery afoot I reckon!! Who's diddled Harry out of his inheritance?

> Harry and Hermione looked at him in respect. Ron just looked confused.

Okay, I'm calling it here; Hermione's going to end up with Neville. I don't think he's been paired with anyone yet?

I'm pleased that you took pains to depict the actual wedding as a non-happy event.

Not sure the 'not magically enforced' thing makes sense in a magical world that is sincere about making concubines 'chattel'. Why not go the whole hog? Why stop at enforcing it magically? House elves are magically restricted to obey their masters, and the girls have been made out to be equivalent to the elves in standing a couple of times.

I feel that the girls signing the hotel register was a mistake. As legal 'property' why would they sign in? I doubt wizards' elves ... or their suitcases ... have to do so.

Okay, another cliffhanger ... it surely *must* be a death eater attack this time!?! :-) Or maybe Harry would prefer that to the 'scene that greeted him'?

You know, I really hope that Harry doesn't make love to the girls on his 'wedding' night, or even soon thereafter. He didn't do so before the ceremony ... doing so afterwards would mean that he has fallen in line with the whole thing, that something's changed, that he now has the 'right' or power to do so. That he's acknowledged that this magical silliness, this travesty, has influenced him, or that he's taken advantage of it. Which goes against his statement of wanting them to continue to act as 'girlfriends'. I'd rather some other event or epiphany spur his joining with them rather than 'using' what was a *sad* event for the girls and their families. Oh well. As long as it's clear that the girls welcome his advances it'll be okay, I suppose.

Crys replied:

The Greengrass and Davis men weren't trying to intimidate Harry.   They both acknowledged that "meeting the boyfriend" should go vastly different than the situation.   They just both wanted to quietly thank him for digging them out of the hole they were in.

*laugh*   No, sorry, no Bine Astoria to be had here.   She'll grow up to marry whoever she wants.

Yes, Slipknot was obnoxious.   He's a surly goblin.   No theft from the poor, orphan boy, though.   Potters aren't in the "filthy rich" class.

Hermione and Neville?   Not tellin'.

Glad you liked the wedding.

I considered making the chattel magically bound to obey (and many fics do exactly that), but just making it a legal situation works into my story better.   And elves AREN'T magically restricted.   Dobby disobeyed Malfoy in CoS.   He punished himself for it, but nothing indicates he isn't capable of betrayal, even if psychologically it appears to be abhorent to elves in general.

Hmm.   True, maybe the girls shouldn't have signed.   But when Tom pushes the quill into your hand, what are you to do?   So they signed as Daphne and Tracey Potter.   Tom, not realizing anything, assumes it's Missus.

*chuckle*   Yeah, Harry may prefer a DE attack.   He at least knows how to respond to those!

Huh.   I think you're the only one of the reviewers to prefer Harry not bed the girls.   Stay tuned to find out what he actually does (or doesn't).   Next chapter on Friday.

Thanks for the thoughtful review.

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Saturday 1st August 2009 10:28am for The Wedding

There is something poignantly sad and yet hopeful about all of this. Great writing to make me feel that.

I'm disturbed by the goblin conversation where Harry only has 12k Galleons. Something is rotten there I do believe.

Can we kill off the entire Malfoy line just to make a point?

Crys replied:

Glad to hear the emotional impact is hitting someone.

Sorry, that 12k is honest.   No conspiracy to steal from the orphan boy.

Killing off Malfoys . . .   The thought has occurred to me.

irishfighter21 posted a comment on Saturday 1st August 2009 8:02am for The Wedding

Awesome chapter

TheHard posted a comment on Saturday 1st August 2009 6:11am for The Wedding

Ooooh, you evil, evil writter! now that will let us, perverts, to figure what was "that" that Harry saw xD...

And what were he going to ask? "who gets what side of the bed?" duh! who cares!

JBern posted a comment on Saturday 1st August 2009 5:02am for The Wedding

Interesting story so far. Good use of Tracey and Daphne as something more than just 2D props. I look forward to seeing this continue.

Carol Layland posted a comment on Saturday 1st August 2009 4:22am for The Wedding

This story is proving extremely fascinating. Harry now owns two slaves/concubines. How are you going to develop this in future chapters. I am very eagerly awaiting the chapters to see how this will work out. While I am at it What about Harry's inheritance from his family. There has been no mention of the Potter family vaults, Where have they gone?
Carol Layland>clayva10@yahoo.com

Crys replied:

Who's to say that the vault he's been using isn't his only one?

Fanon keeps making him wealthy as the Malfoys, but I'm keeping him more down-to-earth.   Sorry, but no conspiracy to steal from the poor orphan here.